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到dào澳ào洲zhōu后hòu,我wǒ常chán常chán跟ēn外wài婆pó到dào超chāo市shì去qù购òu物wù.澳ào洲zhōu的de超chāo市shì和hé中zhōn国uó的de超chāo市shì比bǐ起qi来li,那nà氛fēn围wéi、那nà场chǎn面miàn,真zhēn是shi天tiān壤rǎn之zhī别bié啊!
先xiān说shuō中zhōn国uó吧b.中zhōn国uó的de超chāo市shì人rén气qì超chāo旺wàn,不bù管uǎn哪nǎ层cén楼lóu,里lǐ面miàn的de人rén都dōu是shì满mǎn满mǎn当dān当dān的de,谁shéi叫jiào中zhōn国uó人rén多duō呢ne.当dān然rán人rén多duō有yǒu人rén多duō的de好hǎo处chù,不bù管uǎn什shén么me商shān品pǐn,都dōu不bù愁chóu卖mài不bu掉diào.特tè别bié是shì打dǎ折zhé的de,件jiàn件jiàn都dōu是shì抢qiǎn手shǒu货huò.比bǐ如rú打dǎ折zhé的de水shuǐ果uǒ柜uì台tái,大dà家jiā围wéi着zhe货huò架jià站zhàn成chén一yì圈quān,安ān安ān静jìn静jìn的de,等děn到dào有yǒu营yín业yè员yuán“哗huā啦lā”一yí下xià倒dào下xi一yì筐kuān水shuǐ果uǒ,所suǒ有yǒu人rén都dōu立lì即jí扑pū上shn去qu乱luàn抢qiǎn一yì通tōn,那nà情qín景jǐn颇pō有yǒu喜xǐ剧jù效xiào果uǒ呢ne.
和hé中zhōn国uó超chāo市shì旺wàn旺wàn的de人rén气qì比bǐ起qi来li,澳ào洲zhōu超chāo市shì就jiù很hěn可kě怜lián了le,除chú了le周zhōu末mò,大dà多duō数shù时shí间jiān都dōu冷lěn冷lěn清qīn清qīn的de.走zǒu进jin超chāo市shì,你nǐ会huì感ǎn觉jué到dào这zhè里li的de超chāo市shì地dì盘pán很hěn小xiǎo,一yì般bān集jí中zhōn在zài一yì层cén楼lóu,营yín业yè员yuán也yě不bù多duō,他tā们men主zhǔ要yào负fù责zé海hǎi鲜xiān柜uì台tái和hé收shōu银yín处chù的de工ōn作zuò.虽suī然rán货huò物wù品pǐn种zhǒn非fēi常chán丰fēn富fù,吃chī的de、穿chuān的de、用yòn的de都dōu有yǒu,但dàn每měi个è品pǐn种zhǒn数shù量liàn极jí少shǎo,特tè别bié是shì水shuǐ果uǒ和hé蔬shū菜cài,大dà概ài是shì因yīn为wèi顾ù客kè不bù多duō的de缘yuán故ù吧b.超chāo市shì的de货huò架jià上shn,各è种zhǒn商shān品pǐn都dōu摆bǎi放fàn得de整zhěn整zhěn齐qí齐qí,从cón不bú见jiàn有yǒu翻fān过uo挑tiāo过uo的de痕hén迹jì,更èn不bú要yào说shuō有yǒu人rén去qù抢qiǎn了le.和hé中zhōn国uó一yí样yàn,澳ào洲zhōu超chāo市shì也yě有yǒu打dǎ折zhé货huò,写mǎi的de人rén也yě很hěn多duō,但dàn绝jué不bú会huì抢qiǎn得de架jià子zi都dōu翻fān掉diào.因yīn此cǐ,在zài澳ào洲zhōu不bù愁chóu写mǎi不bu到dào便pián宜yi货huò.当dān然rán,在zài华huá人rén多duō的de地dì方fn也yě有yǒu例lì外wài.
见jiàn识shi过uo中zhōn国uó和hé澳ào洲zhōu两liǎn种zhǒn超chāo市shì的de风fēn格é,我wǒ觉jué得de,超chāo市shì人rén气qì旺wàn是shì好hǎo事shì,中zhōn国uó人rén多duō也yě是shì事shì实shí,但dàn我wǒ们men自zì身shēn的de素sù质zhì,是shì否fǒu也yě需xū要yào有yǒu所suǒ提tí高āo呢ne?
刘老师点评：
如rú果uǒ要yào写xiě观uān察chá生shēn活huó的de文wén章zhān,在zài作zuò比bǐ较jiào前qián要yào先xiān想xiǎn一yi想xiǎn：比bǐ哪nǎ几jǐ个e方fān面miàn,这zhè几jǐ个e方fān面miàn有yǒu什shén么me不bù同tón?想xiǎn好hǎo了le再zài下xià笔bǐ,文wén章zhān内nèi容rón就jiù不bú会huì重chón复fù交jiāo叉chā,叙xù述shù就jiù会huì有yǒu条tiáo理lǐ.小xiǎo作zuò者zhě将jiān中zhōn国uó的de超chāo市shì与yǔ澳ào洲zhōu的de超chāo市shì作zuò了le一yì番fān比bǐ较jiào.比bǐ较jiào了le哪nǎ些xiē方fān面miàn呢ne?比bǐ顾ù客kè量liàn,货huò物wù品pǐn种zhǒn、数shù量liàn和hé购òu写mǎi行xín为wéi.
作zuò比bǐ较jiào是shì有yǒu难nán度dù的de,因yīn为wèi你nǐ不bù光uān要yào看kàn到dào现xiàn象xiàn,还hái要yào思sī考kǎo其qí中zhōn的de不bù同tón,甚shèn至zhì琢zhuó磨mó出chu这zhè不bù同tón背bèi后hòu的de原yuán因yīn.比bǐ如rú这zhè篇piān文wén章zhān,小xiǎo作zuò者zhě对duì比bǐ了le中zhōn国uó和hé澳ào洲zhōu的de超chāo市shì,他tā看kàn到dào了le中zhōn国uó超chāo市shì里li满mǎn满mǎn当dān当dān的de人rén,看kàn到dào了le澳ào洲zhōu超chāo市shì里li的de冷lěn冷lěn清qīn清qīn,他tā想xiǎn到dào了le中zhōn国uó人rén口kǒu多duō,澳ào洲zhōu人rén口kǒu相xiān对duì少shǎo.小xiǎo作zuò者zhě再zài比bǐ货huò物wù品pǐn种zhǒn和hé数shù量liàn,中zhōn国uó超chāo市shì多duō,澳ào洲zhōu超chāo市shì少shǎo,他tā看kàn到dào了le中zhōn国uó超chāo市shì的de琳lín琅lán满mǎn目mù,澳ào洲zhōu超chāo市shì的de空kōn空kōn落luò落luò.再zài比bǐ两liǎn个e地dì方fn的de人rén的de购òu写mǎi行xín为wéi,他tā看kàn到dào了le中zhōn国uó超chāo市shì里li人rén们men抢qiǎn着zhe挑tiāo选xuǎn水shuǐ果uǒ的de情qín形xín,看kàn到dào了le澳ào洲zhōu超chāo市shì摆bǎi放fàn得de整zhěn齐qí有yǒu序xù的de蔬shū菜cài水shuǐ果uǒ,就jiù算suàn是shì打dǎ折zhé商shān品pǐn也yě一yí样yàn有yǒu序xù地de挑tiāo选xuǎn和hé购òu写mǎi.比bǐ较jiào了le这zhè三sān方fān面miàn的de不bù同tón后hòu,小xiǎo作zuò者zhě思sī考kǎo了le不bù同tón背bèi后hòu的de原yuán因yīn――人rén口kǒu数shù量liàn不bù同tón.他tā还hái进jìn一yí步bù得dé出chū自zì己jǐ的de结jié论lùn,尽jìn管uǎn人rén多duō是shì事shì实shí,但dàn我wǒ们men自zì身shēn的de素sù质zhì还hái有yǒu待dài提tí高āo呢ne.
看kàn来lái,小xiǎo作zuò者zhě不bù仅jǐn是shì冷lěn静jìn的de旁pán观uān者zhě,而ér且qiě是shì深shēn沉chén的de思sī考kǎo者zhě,在zài实shí际jì生shēn活huó中zhōn一yí定dìn也yě是shì一yí个e积jī极jí的de行xín动dòn者zhě.